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Some people say that it is important to keep your home and work place tidy, with everything organized and in its correct place. What is your opinion about this?

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Everyone prefers to be at a place which is clean
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comfortable and stress-free. Always well planning and arranging things in a perfect way is
ideal
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ideally
 and suitable for those who are either living a dream life with lot of household help or in a workplace with zero expectations.
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in practical life
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it is not always possible to provide
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 an environment.
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such
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 expectations
makes
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make
 an individual extremely rigid. In my essay, I will elaborate how significant it is to be perfect in corporate culture. At the same time how rules or attitude can have some degree of flexibility when one is at home. In a corporate culture
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an individual is a set of expectations to be fulfilled. To deliver
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, efficient management of time is directly related to being organised and structured. Time plays a crucial role in enhancing worker's
efficiency which
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efficiency, which
 has a direct impact on an employee's growth.
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 is evident to express that being planned will have positive outcomes
at
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in
of
workplace
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the workplace
.
House
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The house
 is a place of comfort where an individual is among family members.
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 entitles us convenience and flexibility
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because no one is being judged or marked down on performance.Having said
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being organised and planned will always assist in
smooth functioning
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the smooth functioning
 of routine life. To recapitulate
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I suggest that planning
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structuring, organising can have positive results until it becomes a stressful task.
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, I opine to
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, I opine,
 be highly organised and well-planned when one is at work.
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home is not meant to increase
stress but
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stress, but
 a place where an individual can be oneself.
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suggest
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suggests
 that some extent of flexibility in tidiness or planning can be provided.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Productivity
  • Distractions
  • Organized
  • Clutter
  • Stress levels
  • Professionalism
  • Creativity
  • Inspiration
  • Flexibility
  • Spontaneity
  • Personal preference
  • Cultural perspective
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