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Governments and big companies should work together to reverse environmental damage, rather than making individuals responsible for that. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

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The
last
 decade has seen an adverse impact to the
environment
. While some people believe that it is their sole responsibility to protect the nature, many strongly think that the World Governments and Multinational companies are not in sync to safeguard the
environment
.
This
 essay elicits both viewpoints and presents my stand that the responsibility lies with the governments and large organizations to be synchronous in protecting the
environment
. On the one hand, some citizens believe that it is their moral responsibility to safeguard their surroundings.
This
 is because these people are inspired by many documentaries which highlight individual's contributions towards the
environment
 and the impact it creates in the ecosystem. To illustrate
this
 better, many Newzealanders have formed their own groups to safeguard their marine life from illegal fishing and pollution. Even though people's actions are coherent to support the
environment
, without the government's and big companies support they have less resources to continue with these activities. If these entities support the individual's activities in safeguarding the
environment
, a better future lies ahead for the upcoming generations.
On the other hand
, many people strongly advocate that the governments and large organizations should join hands in protecting the
environment
.
For example
, In India individuals do not use plastic bags, whereas the government supports factories that creates environmental hazards.
This
 can be attributed to the lack of procedures and discussions between the government and these companies. Unless the accountability is seeded with these entities, it is nearly impossible for the individuals alone to protect the mother nature. Having looked at both the sides my viewpoint is that the Governments and Multinational corporation's efforts should be coupled with the individual's efforts in safeguarding the
environment
.
Submitted by S Gandhi on

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