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Comparison pie charts children and adults eating place preferences during 2005 in US.

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The two pie charts illustrate the location where adults (20+) and children (2-9 years old) consumed
food
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 in the year 2005 in the US. Overall, both adults and children ate
most
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the most food
most foods
food
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 at
home
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. The two
charts
feline mammal usually having thick soft fur and no ability to roar: domestic cats; wildcats
cats
 were split into
home
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,
resturant
a building where people go to eat
restaurant
restaurants
, fast
food
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 joints, other away from
home
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 and school (only for children).
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Firstly in
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Firstly, in
 regards to adults, highest proportion were eating at
home
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 followed by fast
food
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 joints. While
resturant
a building where people go to eat
restaurant
 eaters and proportion eating at other places had more or less the same percentage.
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Secondly in
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Secondly, in
 terms of children's data, they
has
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have
 a similar trend
to
Suggestion
for
 adults as most of them ate
home
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 (67%), followed by fast
food
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 joints.
However
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, the least proportion was divided
in
Suggestion
into
 other away from
home
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 and school. The most significant difference was seen between the number of adults and children who ate in
resturants
a building where people go to eat
restaurants
restraints
 as the percentage was two times higher than children.
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