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Some people think that it is too difficult for poor people or people from rural areas to go to university. So that the universities should make it especially easy for them. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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A group of people believes that it's difficult, for people from a village
environment
 or less privileged people to get
acceptance
 in universities, so what should university do? Make getting
acceptance
 easy for them, would
this
 help? I would partially disagree with the statement mentioned above. People from a different
environment
 rather than the city would have to face many problems, like the culture they posses is completely different when compared to city culture because people in the city live a more sophisticated lifestyle in comparison to people living in villages. There are many other problems beside the one stated above. Even if a
scholar
 gets
acceptance
Suggestion
accepted
in
Suggestion
into
 a university on the bases of his or her capabilities, there are chances that they would find themselves alone as they would be considered an outsider.
This
 sort of behaviour could lead to some major problems, like students getting bullied or treated like slave if they are from a poor
environment
. These types of students could
also
 have problem in finding jobs as people won'
t
 give them equal opportunity because they aren'
t
 aware of the culture the posses.
This
 would lead to difficulty in survival of the
scholar
. Considering all the points mentioned above, I would not agree with the statement university management should make it easier for people from poor
environment
 as getting
acceptance
 won'
t
 solve the until we change the mentality of the society because if society doesn'
t
 aspect the
scholar
,
then
 it would be difficult for the
scholar
 to solve.
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