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Crime rate, in most countries, is often higher in urban areas than rural area. Why do you think that is? What can be done to reduce the crime rate?

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These days there is an enormous increase in the rate of criminal activities in cities when compared to the areas in rural.In
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 suggest the solutions like increasing, defending skills and awareness programs. Due to less awareness of education. As few people cannot afford to buy their basic needs
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they often lead to make people get into crime to earn money.
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the surroundings
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the present statistics show that in rural areas the people are more educated and many people migrate to urban areas for earning money who are less educated.The child abuse
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thefts
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bribe these are the which has become more in recent years. The government has to provide counselling to those criminals and should punish them so, they will not repeat the mistake.It should
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My friend was recently was attacked by a stranger.She has been learning boxing
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which has helped her to get away from the robber.Everyone should have essential knowledge in protecting them.
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The people are more concerned about the things rather than the values which in return is causing troubles. In conclusion
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In the city everyone so busy in their lives nobody cares about other people.Where as in villages everyone looks out for each other and help them.
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 criminals trying to reduce their crime other people in their group provoke them. We have discussed the above causes which are leading to robberies and the solutions how to control these situations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crime rate
  • urban areas
  • rural areas
  • populations
  • economic disparities
  • illegal activities
  • anonymity
  • unemployment
  • youth
  • drug and gang problems
  • aggressive behavior
  • temptation
  • denser living conditions
  • pronounced
  • alternative means of income
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