Today, high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Submitted by mittonguyen2001 on Wed, 08/12/2020 - 15:18 Many people believe that the reason for the tremendous revenue of consumer items is the power of advertising no to real needs. I totally disagree with

this

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view and I will discuss two main reasons in following paragraphs.

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, customers are getting smarter so they

can not

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be influenced by advertising. Specifically, they only decide to buy

daily product

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a daily product

when they have real demands or after they read

review

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reviews

and feedback of the product

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groups or in forum in Internet.

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, a study shows that 70% of customers in a local supermarket joined more than one online group

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during the night of the present day

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to read reviews, feedback or ask other members about the item before they decide to buy it. Another example is Shark Hung, who have supermarket chains in Vietnam, invested 1 billion VND in 2018 for advertising

campaign but

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campaign, but

online reviews

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are

adverse so the sales were still unchanged. It is clear that, companies should

invested

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invest

for product's quality rather than advertising. A multitude of people still

believe

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advertising is manipulating consumers, they state that many teenagers buy items because they only want to advocate their celebrities.

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, I believe

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to be a very shortsighted view because before young people buy some goods, they will ponder their benefit.

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, 60% of Taylor Swift’s fans say that they not only buy her products because they admire

her but

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her, but

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the items is definitely well-designed and sophisticated. It is obvious that the sales of items rely on their quality In conclusion, I do not believe that

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higher

income of consumer goods

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thanks to the power of advertising. Not only because consumers

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become wise, but

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they study the good's benefit carefully before buy it

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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299 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

consumer behavior
perceived need
lifestyle aspirations
brand image
prestige
psychological techniques
scarcity
social proof
celebrity endorsements
technological advancements
product innovations
emerging consumer needs

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Today, high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Fully explain your ideas

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep course? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Some people think that the internet is shrinking the world with their benefits.Other argue that it has a adverse effect on civilizations due to poor famiy relationships Discuss both views

Many families move to different countries. Some people think children can benefit from this, while others consider it is hard for children if families move to a foreign country. Discuss both views and your opinion.

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

some people think that to be successful , you need to get in a university degree. where as others say it is not true. discuss both ideas and give your opinion ?