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Space travel has been possible for some time and some people believe that space tourism could be developed in the future. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Space
 travel has been made commercially viable in some countries for people to discover the universe. In my opinion, it has both negative and positive effects on each nation. On the one
hand there
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hand, there
 are some negative sides caused by
space
 travelling. One of them is environmental degradation. It is obviously that operating spaceships
requires
Suggestion
require
 a lot of energy, from fossil fuels and releases a large amount of emissions,
as a result
 it depletes the natural resources and cause global warming. Another reason is that travelling into
space
 is really dangerous. It is because people cannot adapt to the new environment of universe quickly and it is easy to cause some problems relating to their health.
Moreover
, there are not any hospital there and medical equipment is
also
 inadequate. High accident risks
also
 may happen when human come into
space
Suggestion
the space
. For
xample
an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
,
pacecraft
a craft capable of traveling in outer space; technically, a satellite around the sun
spacecraft
 accidents, similar to plane crashes, can cause fatal accidents among a large number of passengers In
term
Suggestion
terms
 of positive effects,
this
 industry can contribute to the betterment of whole society. Apparently, more job opportunities would be created in order to meet the increasing demand of
space
 tourism, which can reduce the unemployment rate in the future. When
space
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 companies generate more revenues from tourists, they can pay more taxes for national budget so that the governments can upgrade other public infrastructures and services. In conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 agree that
space
 travelling has both some negative developments concerning the decline of the environment and the danger to passengers’ lives and positive sides about the contribution to
development
Suggestion
the development
 of society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advancement in technology
  • Scientific knowledge
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Inequality
  • Regulation
  • Sustainable practices
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