People today generall have better lives than people in the past did. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It’s often said that People who live in
a
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modern age today always get
a better growth conditions
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better growth conditions
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than in the past had before . I agree with
this
view, but there still
have
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some reason to say that the opinion which has been mentioned on
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topic is not completely true for all of the situations .
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First , Talk about the facilities that we have today from school
equipments
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equipment
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,
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medical theory to modern technology ,
ect
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etc
….. it is obvious that they’re more convenient than in the past.
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, nowadays if you wanna send a letter or to talk with someone who
live
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far away, you just need a click and send an email to them or just make a phone call .
Moreover
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there were many diseases that people in the past did not have the treatment for
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this
, but in
this
high-tech medical age, it is easy to get a good treatment for these diseases
although
there
is
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are
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some of
that
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them
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right now
also
do not have the treatment.In
addiction
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addition
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, present-day, we
also
have
many
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beneficial
equipment
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equipments
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which supports
for
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our study stage. In contrast , because of The improvements
of
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our
life
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, modernizations in many majors like education , technology ,
medical
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,… that
leading
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to the destruction of the environment on the earth.To contrast,
modern
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buildings, it’s obvious that we have to cut down trees to get the materials , to exploit many other minerals, which
is
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destructing
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our natural environment , and that cause the greenhouse effect and the heating of our planet. In conclusion, I believe that nowadays
w
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we
absolutely
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ty
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to
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have a better life than in
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the
th
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the
past, but ut there are some aspects that we have to
tack l e
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tackand
,improve to make our life more and more effective
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