increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast-food. it is necessary for Government to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree with it?

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It is scientifically believed that individuals are facing health obstacles due to having excessive fast food. So, some people opine that the government's intervention is imperative and it should impose higher price including tax. But I do not consider that price should be risen by imposing a higher tax. So, I disagree with

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statement. So, I will discuss my point of view in upcoming paragraphs that how individuals are getting fat as well as threat and how can we get rid out of

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issue.

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of all, in

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modern era, with the development of every field, cuisine industry

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has grown and brought multifarious varieties of cuisine, but fast food has become popular in

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world and people get used to of

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variety and face enormous health problems.

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, various newspapers show us that if someone eats meal which is made by burger and bread,

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he gets fitness issues,

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as fat, pain in joint, and weak in body. These problems happen because of

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meal does not have nutrition, which insists us to be strong from inside and prevents us from diseases.

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of all, as we all know it is burning issue these days that

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kind of meal has become harmful for us as we eat it in more quantity. So, people should change their cooking habits and follow some newspapers which provide us some tips on healthy diet.

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, the government should organize some events in every town to aware youth regarding disadvantage of unhealthy cuisine.

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, people should follow some television show, which advises us to preserve our health. Coming to an outcome, rising tax is not solution to reduce the number of infants who get fast food more rather than other healthy snacks. So, youngsters should be forced to aware about unhealthy foodstuff by television shows and newspapers add so that they could get knowledge about the side effect of hamburgers and breads.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

325 words

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increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast-food. it is necessary for Government to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree with it?

Fully explain your ideas

Parents can punish their children when they do something wrong, agree or not?

n1) Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

in some countries, younger people are neglecting their right to vote. what problems does this cause and what are some of possible solutions?

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