It is better for children if the whole family including aunts, uncles and so on are involved in a child’s upbringing, rather than just their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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children nurturing

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children, nurturing

not only by

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a father or mother; one who begets or one who gives birth to or nurtures and raises a child; a relative who plays the role of guardian

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by other close relatives as us beneficial and some think that it should be avoided.

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question from both sides. In my opinion, it's required to involve grandparents in

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process while other relatives' impact may be harmful in some cases. With grandparents' care, wisdom, and calmness children will be protected and well taught. Same time other

more younger

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younger

relatives can expose different examples of

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

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so in most cases, it should be limited to some reliable amount of communication time. Without

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the relatives' support

it's quite hard sometimes to keep life/work balance and

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spent the required time for children to give them all the care and support. So from my point of view, it's really great to involve other close relatives as grandparents

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the process of children's upbringing

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younger uncles/aunts could cause unexpected impact. From

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statement, I partly agree with the idea of whole family participating in upbringing children.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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It is better for children if the whole family including aunts, uncles and so on are involved in a child’s upbringing, rather than just their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

Many old buildings protected by law are part of a nation’s history. Some people think they should be knocked down and replaced by new ones. How important is it to maintain old buildings? Should history stand in the way of progress?

Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem?

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society? You should write at least 250 words.

people say that crime reports on TV and newspaper have many disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?