Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Smoking is injurious to health is a well established fact, but it is

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a choice that a person makes. The right of smoking publicly always has a divided opinion among the non-smokers who find it rude and unhealthy and among the smokers who find it inconvenient to find secluded space to

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. Even though it may seem like a violation of persons freedom, I think smoking in public places should be banned. When a person smokes, he injects nearly over 100 hazardous substances in his body, but when he exhales

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quite of them are released out as well. Various studies, have proven the aforementioned fact and

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shown devastating effect passive smoking can cause, including cancer and deprecated lung capacity. When people

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in public, they are not only damaging their health, but

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putting everyone around them at risk. Not to mention, the number naive young individuals falling prey to smoking due to peer pressure or just by seeing others do it, under the assumption that it is cool. Smoking isn't illegal, which implies that its peoples choice to

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or not.

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makes smokers think that, not smoking in public places is inconvenient and an unnecessary societal norm which doesn't have any real benefit.

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, smoking and breathing in passive

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can be really harmful for pregnant women and young children with developing lungs.

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could deadly for people who has lung problems. Concurrently, smoking is highly addictive, it's one the most difficult vice to leave and smokers inspire other smokers, just like a falling pile of dominos. In conclusion, as unhelpful the benefit may it seem to smokers, smoking in public places can cause real damage to people around them and act as a catalyst in the conversion of non smokers to smokers. So banning smoking in public places not only helps the society, but

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sets an example and leads the society to a healthier path.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

327 words

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Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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