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Some people say governments should build sport facilities for professional athletes. Others believe that such facilities should be open to everyone. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued by some that the construction of sports facilities should be undertaken by government institutions, to provide for people who pursue athletics as a profession. Others disagree as they think that these facilities cannot be exclusive. In my opinion, separate provisions need to be made for training sports people. Since these will be built with taxpayers' money, it is understandable as why people see
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 particular cause, when it does not contribute to society as much as science labs and universities
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, I believe it is important for the government to encourage athletes. Just like any other job, distinctions in sports should be rewarded. Those who show extraordinary athletic talent and potential, need proper sports facilities. Discrimination in funding needs to end.
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, amenities for general fitness and special training are very different. By creating workout space for both, expensive tools and equipment, falls in danger of mishandling or even theft. These sports
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 play the role of research facilities, as the bodies of athletes are studied and new discoveries and innovations are made.
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, these athletic facilities need to remain as pristine training and study areas, separated from people who are simply trying to workout on the weekend. In conclusion, the government is responsible for looking after the needs of both groups. For every science lab or community college, both the community gym and a sports centre should be built.
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