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Many people believe that spending a lot of money on weddings is fine, while others completely disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion and examples.

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Wedding
Suggestion
The wedding
 is
important ritual
Suggestion
an important ritual
 of society. It is said by some individuals that spending a lot of
money
 on
wedding
Suggestion
a wedding
 is fine while others believe that it is a wastage of
money
.
Accept space
.
In my perspective, it should be the personal choice of any individual to spend
money
 on weddings and my viewpoints on both these issues will be elaborated in the aforementioned paragraphs. On one hand, people who have
lot
Suggestion
lots
 of
money
 wants to show their luxurious lifestyle to others by spending too much
money
 on wedding ceremonies in order to show it to show it to society
.
Accept space
.
For instance
, a survey was conducted in India in 2016 and its result was that fifty percent celebrities of India spend
money
 lavishly on weddings. Another reason of spending
money
 on weddings is that people
wants
Suggestion
want
 to enjoy life so they prefer to do some ceremonies and spend some
money
 on these kind of rituals.
On the other hand
, some individuals think that spending too much
money
 is not necessary because people should use
money
Suggestion
the money
 on marriages according to their income level and they can utilize that
money
 for future purposes
.
Accept space
.
For example
, it
is seen in in
Suggestion
is seen in
 Indian society that some people take
loan
Suggestion
loans
 from the banks and spend
money
 on marriages. To recapitulate, I would like to write that people should not follow blindly to others and they should think before spending
money
 on marriages.
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