12. Some people believe that success in life depends upon hard work and determination, while others believe that other factors like money and personal appearance are important

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Everyone wants to become successful in
life
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. In order to achieve
success
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in
life
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everyone make efforts in their
life
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.
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It is said by some individuals that in order to become successful in
life
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a person should be hardworking and determined towards his goals. While
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
believe that
money
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and
personality
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the personality
of people is more important and both the viewpoints will be elaborated in the following paragraphs.
To begin
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with, without hard work and determined
mind no
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mind, no
one can achieve
success
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in their
life
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. All the famous people of the world have become successful only with the
hardwork
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hard work
. Very few people get
success
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in
life
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on the basis of fate and luck.
For instance
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, Kulwant
singh
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Singh
was the famous writer of Punjabi and in his initial time period he used to write poems and stories but he did not get any kind of appreciation and acceptance but made efforts continuously and
finally
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he became
successful writer
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a successful writer
of Punjabi.
On the other hand
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, some people have contradictory viewpoints they believe that
money
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and physical features like personality is more important for achieving
success
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in
life
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.
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To illustrate
,
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,
in film and
fasion
how something is done or how it happens
fashion
industry people
are
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is
more attracted towards beauty and they admire
beauty
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the beauty
and girls who are beautiful get
primary opportunity
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a primary opportunity
in
fasion
how something is done or how it happens
fashion
and film industry.
Furthermore
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, some people get
success
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because with
money
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they can establish
business
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a business
.
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To recapitulate
,
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I would like to write that
hardwork
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hard work
and determination
is
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are
really essential in order to achieve
success
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in
life
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and a person can not get
success
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on the basis of
money
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and personal appearance.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • perseverance
  • discipline
  • resilience
  • effort
  • tenacity
  • external factors
  • financial resources
  • favorable appearance
  • perceptions
  • advantages
  • intrinsic
  • extrinsic
  • sustainable
  • facilitating
  • undeniable
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