17. More and more people work from home and student will study at home if computer technologies become cheap and accessible

Technology has changed the entire world. It is said by some individuals that if computers
,
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,
laptops and tablets will be cheaper in
future
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future, then
then
student
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the student
will get
chance
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a chance
the chance
to do studies online and employees can work from
home
.
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This
trend
has various benefits and drawbacks and my viewpoints on
this
topic will be elaborated in the aforementioned paragraphs.
To begin
with, if computers will become cheaper
then
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than
workers can work
from from
a giver or sender
from
home
this
will be really beneficial for the organization because it can reduce their expenses like rent of building and other expenses which will definitely increase the overall profit of the company. Another merit of
this
trend
is that students can study from
home
and
this
will
also
decrease the school fees of students.
On the other hand
, if students will study from
home
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home, then
then
teacher’s role
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the teacher’s role
will be reduced in the society and it will become competitive for the teachers to teach because they will get additional training for that purpose
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.
Another drawback of
this
trend
will be that sometimes it is difficult for employees to create
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a congenial environment
at
home
because of the presence of all the family members which distract their concentration. To recapitulate, I would like to say that
this
trend
has merits as well as demerits because it is well said by someone every coin has two sides.
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