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In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?

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Nowadays, countries are facing all together a new problem,
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, a student who completes their graduation are often unemployed even if they score well in their examinations. What factors would have led to
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 kind of situation? In the passage we would discuss about the reason for above mentioned statement. There are many factors which lead to
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 kind of situation, but in
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 passage we would be taking a look at common reasons,
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 as demand for
graduate
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 students is less in today's market because companies are becoming high tech and does not require human to be paid extra for the work which could be accomplished by a machine. As the technology is growing company does not require skilled labour as much as they used to require earlier. The
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 and the most important reason, would be the number of students that
graduate
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 every year which has increased drastically over the years when compared to previous years. Since, demand for the job, has not increased in a similar manner, which often leads to a higher number of
graduate
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 students in comparison to jobs available in the market.
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 is not, just the case companies have even raised their standards for selection, they often look for an experienced
graduate
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 student. In my view, the university should change their curriculum of education and involve internship with them as
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 would create high changes for a
graduate
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 student for getting an offer from a company
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, they should even conduct mock interviews as
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 could help the students to understand what an interviewer is looking for.
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