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23. Some people are happy to spend their whole life in the same area, others prefer to live in many different places in their life time. Discuss both view and give your opinion?

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Each
place
 has its own beauty and it’s the personal choice of all the individuals to live in the same
place
 or to migrate to different
placesplace
Suggestion
places place
.Some individuals believe that they want to live in the same
placeplace
a point located with respect to surface features of some region
place
place place
 for their whole
life
 while others prefer to migrate in many different places in their
life
.I will elaborate my viewpoints in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, some individuals think that they are more satisfied and contented in the same area because they are familiar about the culture
,
Accept space
,
 language and food of that
place
 which is really convenient for them and their
life
 is more comfortable in that area.
Furthermore
, when they live in the same
placeplace
Suggestion
place place
 they have more job stability because there is no need to change their job again and again
On the other hand
, some people are very adventurous and like to migrate to different places because they enjoy living in different places and want to change the monotony of their
life
.
Accept space
.
Another reason is that when people move to different places
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 they get opportunity to learn a new language and taste the different food items of the new country. To recapitulate, I would like to write that people enjoy change. So every individual should migrate to different
place
 enjoy the different experiences of that
place
.
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