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It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents. Do you agree or disagree?

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Home
 is a place where a person gets comfortable environment.It is said by some individuals that college students should live in hostels and they should not live with their parents. I agree with the aforementioned statement and my viewpoints will be elaborated in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, one of the main
advantage
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advantages
 of living separate from parents is that it makes a child responsible and independent
.
Accept space
.
 For instance, when a student live in a
hostel
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hostel, then
then
 he has to make adjustments with others because he/ she shares a room with others. So he/ she gets totally different environment at
hostel
Suggestion
the hostel
a hostel
 which makes him / her tough. Sometimes a child is more pampered at
home
 because he/ she gets all the facilities at
home but
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home, but
 when he/ she moves to
hostel
then
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than
 he / she does not get all the things easily.
Furthermore
, another benefit of living at
hostel
 is that in
hostel
 students can get chance to study together and student can have free time for studying together and they can utilize their free time in a positive way because sometime when a children lives alone at
home
then
 he
/
she can not get the company of others and tries to fix his/ her problems by his / her own methods. To recapitulate, I would like to write that a child gets everything in his
/
her
home
 so he
/
she must experience the lifestyle of
hostel
Suggestion
the hostel
.
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