Many people are choosing to move to cities. Why is this happening? Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages

These days living standard of people
has changed
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have changed
are changing
due to modernization and globalization. People prefer to live in cities and
this
is happening in developed and developing countries.
This
trend has advantages as well as disadvantages.I will elaborate my viewpoints in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with,
First
merit of living in cities is
employment
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employed
. People get more jobs in urban areas as compared to rural areas so they prefer to migrate in cities because in cities there are more industries, schools and hospitals.
For instance
, a survey was conducted in 2017 in the state of Punjab in which it was estimated that 50 percent people of that area moved to bigger cities like Mumbai, Delhi, for better work opportunities.Another benefit is that people shift to cities for
better living standard
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better living standards
a better living standard
because in
cities there
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cities, there
are more facilities like better educational institutes, more entertainment facilities like cinema halls and well equipped and maintained hospitals. On
the the
definite article
the
other hand, there are some drawbacks of moving to cities.
Firstly
, it is creating the problem of unemployment and created tough competition for jobs in bigger cities.Another drawback is that it has
also
created the shortage of land in big cities because more people have migrated to cities and government has cleared forest to increase the size of land in big cities
.
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.
To recapitulate, I would like to write that there are pros as well as cons of migrating to cities but I think
advantages
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the advantages
outweigh disadvantages.
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