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: The pie charts below describe the electric energy production a major source of energy in the US. Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information in the charts

: The pie charts below describe the electric energy production a major source of energy in the US. Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information in the charts
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The two pie charts reveal the ratio of the five particular types of electric
energy
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 production in the United State in 1970 and 1980. At the onset, it is apparently seen that the ratio of coal and nuclear grew markedly
whereas
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 others declined. Now, turning to the details: Coal occupied the highest percentage of the electiric
energy
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 production in five major sources of
energy
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 during these ten years: rising from 47 % in 1970 to 51 % in 1980. The ratio of hydro in 1980 was three quarters times as high as that of hydro in 1970 (12 % compared with 16 %). The percentages of oil in 1970 and 1980 were roughly similar, 12 % and 11 % respectively.
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, there was a considerable growth in the percentage of nuclear from 1970 to 1980, increasing from 1% to 11%. Natural gas
also
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 experienced a gradual fall in the proportion of the eclectric
energy
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 production, from 24 % in 1970 to 15 % in 1980.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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