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These days many families move to other countries for work. Some people believe that the children in these families benefit from this move. However, others believe that it makes life more difficult for the children. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Recently it is common for families moving to different countries looking for work. It is said that it brings advantages for children from these families. But some people believe that it is not true and it can make a child's life worse. In my opinion, it is more beneficial for young people.
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, when the parents decided to change
country
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 of living kids get an excellent opportunity to broaden their horizons. People in younger age are able to learn new things faster.
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, they will master
second
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 language really fast without any problems
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, studying in foreing dialect will accelerate their skills in speaking and writing extremely fast.
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, my little cousin moved to Sweden with his parents. After two years he speaks perfectly in two languages, polish and Swedish.
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, adults leave their
country
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 of origin to find a job with a better salary. What I mean by
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, they do it to provide a better life for their beloved families.
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, children get higher chances of proper education due to that they have greater opportunities in future life.
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, with diploma from top rank university they will be able to find a job they have dreamed about.
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Moreover they
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Moreover, they
 will meet people from different cultures which will have good impact on them. In conclusion, parents who decided to move to another
country
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 for better job do it for their children, to provide them better lives. I think it is great chance for young people to learn a lot more than staying in
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country
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the country
 of origin.
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