Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading use to buy things. Others think that it is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Whether the value of advertisements is attracting customers and generating profit or just a failing product of media is a controversial topic. I will discuss both opinions before adopting my personal viewpoints. On the one hand, it is undeniable that advertising is an optimal choice to promote products.
This
is because the technological development considerably contributes to the rapid spreading speed of
media
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the media
. Specifically, the substantial number of Internet users offers more potentials for commercial products to approach consumers through social platforms
such
as Facebook and Google. Despite some unsolicited contents, after accessing subjects, those advertisements could still stimulate customers’ curiosity with tempting promises
such
as discount deals or the sudden efficiency, which entice individuals to purchase inessential items to satisfy their feelings.
Thus
, the marketing strategies are likely to succeed due to
producers’ understanding
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the producers’ understanding
a producers’ understanding
of clients’ psychology and inclination.
On the other hand
, I would argue that these days, advertisements become more valueless as most of people ignore those contents. The
first
compelling reason would be the sense of irritation. With the burgeoning number of commercial products, it eventually becomes excessive and annoys people.
For example
, Vietnamese viewers frequently report
Youtube
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YouTube
for too many advertisements making them feel disturbed. Another contributing factor is the benefits of products are sometimes
exaggerated which
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exaggerated, which
swindle them out of their money and defile their faith in
media
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the media
.
For instance
, a book called “5000 English words” of a Vietnamese author has been recently sued for sensitive images relating to religious and gender discrimination in spite of the
celebrities’
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celebrity
celebrity’s
endorsement. In conclusion
,
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,
nowadays, the prevalence and incredibility of advertisements tarnish its meaning in consumers’ eyes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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