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Some people think that the best way to run a business is within the family. What are advantages and disadvantages of a family run business.

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Nowadays, the young generation has become more passionate to start their own new
business
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 with the friends. Some people opine that, doing
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 with the family members is a good idea
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 of doing with others. I believe that,
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 trend has its own merits and demerits. In
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 essay, I want to shed some light on the benefits and drawbacks of the family
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. To commence with, the main advantage of the family
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 is not only the trust but
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 loyalty.
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, the amount of the profit and loss are equally shared between the members of the
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 the reason, it is not hard to run the
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, they can grow better together and can achieve good fame in the world. Foe example, Dhirubhai and Mukesh Ambani have a common
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 name as 'Ambani brothers'.
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, there are drawbacks as a part of a family
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, there might be ego related issues between brothers, which ultimately creates dispute and ruin the family.
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, they might face inequality in terms of respect, money, work responsibilities and sharing.
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, it sometimes risky, when one partner does the murder of the other to become an owner of the company or in jealousy.
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, 5% of the family murder cases are due to be a part of the same
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, not all of the family members specially youngsters are willing to join the
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, in
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 case if they join, they do not put efforts for the betterment of the company, which is detrimental to the growth and reputation of the company. To conclude, the family
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 has many advantages
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 as sharing, rise, trust and loyalty only when everyone as a part of a
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 should work for the growth of the family as a team without developing jealousy and inequalities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • loyalty
  • trust
  • communication
  • generational knowledge
  • long-term outlook
  • family traditions
  • stability
  • cost-effective
  • flexible payment arrangements
  • conflict
  • tensions
  • roles
  • diversity
  • external perspectives
  • innovation
  • adaptation
  • succession planning
  • instability
  • leadership
  • ownership
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