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International tourism has become a huge industry in the world. Do the problems of international travel outweigh its advantages?

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The
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 industry has been booming for several decades, thanks to budget airlines and cheap accommodations. Some countries rely heavily on
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, as it contributes hugely to their economy.
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, some may argue that they are many benefits to international
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,
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however others
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however, others
 may disagree, as there are several problems that can arise.
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 with, many believe travelling to other nations can result in spread of fatal diseases.
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, Covid-19,
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 virus started in a small city of China in 2019, and spread extensively across the planet. Due to the high contagious nature of the virus, almost every single country closed down the borders to contain the virus, and slow down the outbreak.
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, nowadays most people can travel abroad due to cheap flights and
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,
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 is contributing to the global warming. A recent study, calculated that a flight from New York to London emits close to 980 Kg of carbon dioxide per passenger.
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 has been a major concern, as humanity has increased carbon footprint by 11 fold since 1981.
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, there are many advantages to travelling across the world
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 as exploring different cultures. Millions travel abroad to either learn about the history of the country or just for a vacation. With reasonable ticket prices, many can travel without any difficulty.
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, many nations depend on
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 to bring in the money. Not only
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 creates jobs, it
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 decreases poverty in their countries. To conclude, though
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 is creating more jobs and giving holiday makers a chance to explore different traditions;
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, it is
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 having a negative impact on the environment, and
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 of transmission of deadly infections.
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