Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in life. Reason? Is it a negative or positive trend?

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In modern society, there has been a hot topic of debate that a large number of young couples have delay parenthood.
This
trend
could be traced back to several reasons, and I am of the opinion that the drawbacks of it outweigh the advantages. There are a few reasons as to why parents today decide to give birth in
later stage
Suggestion
a later stage
in
life
. The primary reason may come from the consideration of the development of future career of young people. It is a norm in the world today that the market
become
Suggestion
becomes
more and more competitive and both parents have to go out to work,
thus
they choose to defer having children in order to devote their time and effort to build a sound foundation for their career. Apart from that, raising a child is not easy and can cost a lot of money,
as a result
, a lot of young people have had a thought that older parents may better in doing so. Older fathers and mothers seem to have a strong financial base and have more experience in
life
so they are more willing to take care of children. In my point of view,
this
trend
is more of negative
Suggestion
is more of a negative
is more negative
rather than a positive phenomenon. With regards to benefit, from
parent perspective
Suggestion
a parent perspective
the parent perspective
, they have the chance to pursue their profession without interruption of pregnancy and childcare.
Besides
, children are provided with better quality of
life
and comprehensive education from prosperous and experienced older parents.
However
, the disadvantage that
this
trend
bring
Suggestion
brings
to both family and the whole society is significant, compared with several given advantages. When an aged couple giving birth to a child, they are prone to health risks, especially for the mother in prenatal and postnatal period.
For example
, many older women have had to suffer from excessive bleeding, which seriously threat their
life
, after childbirth. Considering society, with
continuous falling birthrate
Suggestion
a continuous falling birthrate
continuous falling birthrates
throughout the years, the shortage of workforce and substantial cost for will soon become a problem that we must take into account. In conclusion, the tendency that young adults have children at
later age
Suggestion
a later age
can be ascribed to a number of factors
such
as the desire to
purse
carry out or participate in an activity; be involved in
pursue
parse
the career path of young adults.
Although
I believe that people can reap the benefit from
this
trend
, it is still
undeniable
Suggestion
undeniably
the drawbacks are far more serious for people to consider.
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