People think that a hundred years ago, the human race was steadily improving in every area of life. Nowadays, there is no certainty of this case. In which areas do you think we have made important progress nowadays? In which areas do think we still need to make progress?

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It is true that there was a numerical

developments

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development

nowadays due to the advancement of

technology

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, except some areas which have an extensive progress, there are other fields that human should focus on. On the one hand, there is no argument against the fact that

technology

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has the most significant achievements and inventions in recent decades since it has a huge impact every single area. Accompany with the support

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latest

technology

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people

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peoples

’ living standards,

life

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expectancy and other aspects have increased significantly.

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, individuals can integrate

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into

medical field

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the medical field

to do surgery with the probability of positive result are much higher than a hundred years ago.

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have saved

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has saved

saves

is saving

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of many victims who have to suffer with

deadly disease

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a deadly disease

the deadly disease

deadly diseases

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, compared to those who lived in the time where farmers have to harvest manually, people nowadays with the support from autonomous machines can increase their

productivities

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productivity

dramatically.

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, there

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are

some main fields people nowadays have neglect

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as the environmental issue and the poverty. Environment and natural resources should be preserved from the pollution and depleting ozone layers.

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can be resulted from the usage of resources

excessively which

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excessively, which

can seriously pose a threat to human

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, the more improvement

technology

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is, the more gap between the rich and the poor.

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can be result from many factors,

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, people who have a large amount of money are able to improve their quality of

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while the poor have no opportunity.

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this

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could affect their

children

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child

child's

children's

development later since their parents are unable to guarantee the basic needs for their children, which

continuously

seemingly without interruption

continually

increase in the prize. In conclusion, people should continuously develop some areas that are succeeding in development and focus on fields that are paid less attention.

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