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People think that a hundred years ago, the human race was steadily improving in every area of life. Nowadays, there is no certainty of this case. In which areas do you think we have made important progress nowadays? In which areas do think we still need to make progress?

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It is true that there was a numerical
developments
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development
 nowadays due to the advancement of
technology
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.
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, except some areas which have an extensive progress, there are other fields that human should focus on. On the one hand, there is no argument against the fact that
technology
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 has the most significant achievements and inventions in recent decades since it has a huge impact every single area. Accompany with the support
from
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of
 latest
technology
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,
people
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peoples
’ living standards,
life
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 expectancy and other aspects have increased significantly.
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, individuals can integrate
technology
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 into
medical field
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the medical field
 to do surgery with the probability of positive result are much higher than a hundred years ago.
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have saved
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has saved
saves
is saving
life
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 of many victims who have to suffer with
deadly disease
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a deadly disease
the deadly disease
deadly diseases
.
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, compared to those who lived in the time where farmers have to harvest manually, people nowadays with the support from autonomous machines can increase their
productivities
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productivity
 dramatically.
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, there
is
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are
 some main fields people nowadays have neglect
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 as the environmental issue and the poverty. Environment and natural resources should be preserved from the pollution and depleting ozone layers.
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 can be resulted from the usage of resources
excessively which
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excessively, which
 can seriously pose a threat to human
life
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.
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, the more improvement
technology
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 is, the more gap between the rich and the poor.
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 can be result from many factors,
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, people who have a large amount of money are able to improve their quality of
life
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 while the poor have no opportunity.
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,
this
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 could affect their
children
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child
child's
children's
 development later since their parents are unable to guarantee the basic needs for their children, which
continuously
seemingly without interruption
continually
 increase in the prize. In conclusion, people should continuously develop some areas that are succeeding in development and focus on fields that are paid less attention.

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