Some people think nations and individuals should focus on their own personal problems rather than global ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Man is a social animal. Some people think global issues should be neglected by human beings and they should focus on their own problems. My perspective is opposite of

this

view. I will explain my reasons with supportive facts that, why one should pay attention to global issues as well.

Firstly

, in

this

tech-savvy world, problems

such

as; crime rate, cybercrime and pollution are the major issues faced by every nation around the world. These issues are related to individuals as well as to the nations because individuals are part of society. So, if people will ignore these problems, when these are happening around them, someday they will suffer the same complications in their personal life.

For instance

, in Asian countries

such

as India and Pakistan, rape cases are increasing every day, if people will ignore these crimes, who knows they will become victims of these issues. So, global issues cannot be ignored at any cost.

Secondly

, as being a patriot citizen of the nation, it is the duty of every individual to take global issues personally, so that collaboratively we can uproot them from society.

For example

, air pollution is another major global issue. If the citizens of nations will not take it seriously,

then

one day the whole world will suffer from respiratory diseases.

This

way, as being good citizens, it is our duty to take initiatives to prevent global problems. In conclusion, the perspective of some people to focus on individuals' problems rather than global issues is contrary to my views because issues of society cannot be ignored if a person wants to solve his personal issues.

Submitted by Jyot on Fri Aug 21 2020

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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270 words

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Some people think nations and individuals should focus on their own personal problems rather than global ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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