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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others however believe that boys and girls benefit from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own.

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Education make us civilized, cultured and polished. It is said by some individuals that people should not allow their children to take co – education a because of various
reasons while
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reasons, while
other
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others
 think that both sexes learn more effectively when they
study
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 in mixed schools and these viewpoints will be elaborated in the following paragraphs.
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 some of the parents do not send their children to co-educational institute because they think that girls are
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safer
 when they
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 separately and they can
study
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 more freely.
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, in some parts of the Punjab it was tradition that girls were not allowed to talk with boys so parents did not allow their daughters to have education those days because there were limited single sex related schools.
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 , some people have contradictory viewpoints they think that both sexes should be allowed to
study
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 in same school because it will give them chance to remove their hesitation and they will interact more with each other and
this
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 can help them in later stage of their life in which there could be the possibility that they would talk more confidently in future with their colleagues .Another benefit of putting children in same schools is that it will break the rigidness of traditions and bring equality in some countries. To recapitulate, I would like to write that
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 better to educate both children in
same schools
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the same schools
 for their growth and development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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