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The figures below show the Glasgow age demographics in 1998 and the average number of annual hospital visits per capita among Glasglow residents from 1960 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write a minimum of 150 words.

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The two figures give information about the proportion of residents classified to six ranges of
age
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 in 1998 and the number of visits that each local people went to hospital each year in Glasgow from 1960 to 2010. It is clear that in 1998, people aged from 50 to 64 accounted for the highest percentage in Glasgow
age
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 demographics. It
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 can be seen that there has been an upward trend in the annual average hospital visits per capita since 1970. According to the table chart, in 1998, the ratio of Glasgow inhabitants between the ages of 50 and 64 made up 24% in the total figure. The figures for
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 ranges of 35-49, 20-34 and 13-19 were 20%, 16% and 12% respectively.
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 to that, the proportion of both
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 ranges of 0-12 and 64 onward saw the same lowest figure of 14% In the line chart, there was a decrease in
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the average number
 of visits to hospital by each person from 2.3 in 1960 to 2.1 in 1970. The number of times on
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 that each Glasgow locals annually went to hospital experienced a gradual rise, increasing to 2.4, 2.6, 2.9 and 3.1 in 1980, 1990, 2000 and 2010 respectively
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