some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

People nowadays use different methods to connect people around the world together.
For instance
,
music
is among those methods.
Therefore
, some people say that
music
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ISA
is
great way of
communtication
the activity of communicating; the activity of conveying information
communication
to bring cultures and ages together. I agree with
this
idea.
First
,
music
is an
internationally language
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internationally, language
that everybody can understand easily.
Music
is made from notes, sounds and melodies which everybody can feel just by using their hearing
sense
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senses
. Through
music
, people can access into new cultures and
understant
know and comprehend the nature or meaning of
understand
it without any barrier. Each country or
ethinic
denoting or deriving from or distinctive of the ways of living built up by a group of people
ethnic
groups have their own
music
.
For example
, Vietnam has their own type of
music
which is "
Cai
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CAI
Luong". The language in
this
music
can
understable
even for
foreigner
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foreigners
a foreigner
because of the sounds. Low tones express sadness and high tones express happiness. The
soralness
a pain that is felt (as when the area is touched)
soreness
and
delightness
a feeling of extreme pleasure or satisfaction
delights
of
this
music
can easily
unsestand
just by
listen
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listening
.And through "
Cai
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CAI
Luong", foreigner may get to know
part
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a part
of Vietnamese life style.
Second
,
music
has no-aged.
Music
is a great source for every age. From young person to elder one, each of them can understand
music
smoothly. People say each
groups
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group
of age listen to different type of
music
.
This
is
right but
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right, but
at over all,
music
is just a
unsestandable
language that everybody can understand.
Young aged
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Young, aged
people can get how the old aged people used to live by listening to their
music
. Or old aged people
also be
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also are
able to know how the world has changed through listening to young aged people's
music
. For me, I can understand how my grandma's life idea by just listening to her
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
type of
music
.
Therefore
, I can be more
understand
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understanding
about her. In conclusion,
music
is a great way of communication without any
misunderled
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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