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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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People who have made the decision to live in a foreign country face a multitude of problems and many of them stem from the
language
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 barrier, which prevents them from integrating properly into society, as well as making daily life more difficult.
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, these issues are not as serious as they might
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 appear, thanks to modern technology. Smartphones and their applications have done away with lots of the
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an emotional preoccupation
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 of traditional communication. Translation software
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 freely available and accessible,
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 as Google Translate, means that almost anyone can convey basic ideas without learning even a single word of the target
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.
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, map and online shopping programs have done away with the need to ask for directions or negotiate in a foreign
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 altogether, making it a breeze to navigate in a foreign city or purchase necessities. Unfortunately, despite all of our advances, technology has still not managed to replace friendship and
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 fundamental human need is unlikely to be available on the app store any time soon.
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 is problematic because crossing the
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 barrier to make friends and put down roots in a new country or city is one of the most crucial parts of living internationally, as homesickness and other related problems can
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 become devastating to a person’s mental health. Modern technology has, to a large extent, eliminated the need to know a foreign
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language even
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language, even
 when an individual is living in the country where it is spoken,
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 social integration remains problematic.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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