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. These days, in many countries, fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Model Answer:

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Introduction
Teachers are the foundation of any nation because they have the capability to make child civilized, and polished. It is said by some individuals that it is observed in many countries that these days people do not want to become secondary school teachers because of numerous reasons. I will elaborate problems and solutions in the following paragraphs.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with,
firstly
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 these days teachers are overburdened by work because in some countries schools have made it mandatory for teachers to give extra classes to students and they provide classes during their summer and winter
vacations but they
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vacations, but they
 do not get extra money for providing these classes. For instance, a survey was conducted in the schools which were located in the rural area of India and it result was that fifty percent secondary school teachers were not paid for delivering extra classes. Another reason is that in many countries
government
Suggestion
the government
 has provided some additional benefits to students and they create behavioural problems for teachers which has become difficult for teachers.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, there are some solutions for these problems.
Government
Suggestion
The government
 should make laws in which teacher should be paid extra for providing classes during their vacations. Another solution is that school organizations should hire counsellors who can help teachers to manage the behaviour of students. Government should
also
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 make laws in favour of teachers in which they should have a right to punish students who behave badly in classes.
Conclusion
To recapitulate, I would like to write that
teaching profession
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the teaching profession
 is loosing its importance because
government
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the government
 is making laws only in favour of students so, it’s the responsibility of government to make decisions in favour of both teachers and students in order to improve
education system
Suggestion
the education system
.

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