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SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE ACADEMIC SUCCESS DEPENDS MOSTLY ON HAVING A GOOD TEACHER. OTHERS ARGUE THAT IT IS THE ATTITUDE OF THE STUDENT THAT MATTERS MOST. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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In
this
 steep competitive world, most laymen pursue a thought that children get success in study, if they have a good mentor, while the opponents believe that the learner’s attitude play a vital role in that. Both the aspects are elucidated in the upcoming texts followed by my opinion. On the one side, there are numerous reasons which substantiate that a proper guidance of an instructor boost the chance of a scholarly achievement, and the foremost reason is the depth knowledge of the teacher. If a professor provides the proper avenues in class, students easily accomplish their targets by following it. The dissertation work in the post-graduate examination,
for instance
, done under supervision of their high-skilled teachers.
Additionally
, good teachers remove hurdles of their students easily by motivating them. When any teacher understands the graduate interest, they always help and support them to get rid of any problems, which are coming in their works.
Thus
, the knowledge and motivation of a teacher directly proportional to the institutional fame of a pupil. On the flip side, there are many factors to prove the attitude of student plays a vital role in their successful career.
Firstly
, the performance of pupils is the paramount factor to achieve any goal. When any children do not perform well in their study, they unable to accomplish their targets.
Secondly
, the commitment of learners. If students devote their time and show some devotion in their research, it is quite easy to achieve any goal.
For example
, the Indian businessman Mr. Tata makes his own emperor on the base of their adherence
first
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first, then
then
 his well wishers support. So, the involvement, and performance towards the goal plays significant role in the progress. Agglomerating above all the points, it can be said that,
although
, dedication and appropriate performance are essential for academic success, in my opinion, reliable support and sufficient guidance of an instructor is not eschew behind a student's successful career.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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