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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is said that high institute students should be required to participate in unpaid community activities as an indispensable part of their studying programmes. While I accept that it is beneficial for students, I
also
 believe that we should not constrain them to do
volunteer
 activities at university. On the one hand, I would agree that
in addition
 to the main subjects in the classroom, participating in volunteering brings a lot of benefits.
First
, community service as a way to help children reduce stress after stressful lessons Community service is a way to help children reduce stress after stressful lessons.
In other words
, children who take part in organised
volunteer
 work will meet different people to catch up with each other,
therefore
 they can make new friends and generally feel better.
Secondly
, helping those who from a poor background or disabled. It is important for children to learn how to love and share. Helping those who are from a poor background or disabled is important for children to learn how to love and share.
For example
, experiencing voluntary work for teaching poor students will be very likely to help students develop career in the future
On the other hand
, I
also thinks
Suggestion
also think
am also thinking
 that high school should do the mandatory
volunteer
 work when they like and we should not force them.
First
, learning at school accounts for the majority time of the pupils.
In addition
, they
also
 do homework every day.
Hence
, children need more leisure time to relax
instead
 of organising
volunteer
 service that may lead to students have to under greater pressure lead to greater pressure when they do not have enough time to complete their studies.
Besides
, students play sports
such
 as tennis, swimming, soccer and so on. It is necessary for them to gain energy back to study more effectively after a hard day studying.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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