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Education in financial management should be mandatory component of the school program. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement, give reason and relevant example.

#education #management #component #school #program #reason
I certainly agree with the fact that Financial Management should be
mandatory component
Suggestion
a mandatory component
 of the school program reason being it will help the students to understand the
analyzing
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
 money and investment for a person or a business to help make business decisions. To quote an instance accounting department in a company keep all the pay check stacked up
also
 they monitor the inflow and outflow of the cash within an organization among certain departments. As they have the viable understanding in the Financial
manangement
the act of managing something
management
 they can effectively make the decisions and can monitor the cash flow.
However some
Accept comma addition
However, some
 students may not have an interest in the said
subject
Accept comma addition
subject, hence
hence
 for
such
 it can be kept as an optional subject as without interest they will not be able to pay their attention towards the subject.
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