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Some people believe that it is good idea to express the point of view and ideas through social media however other believe opposite do you agree or disagree

#people #idea #point #media
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Every individual
have
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has
 the right to express their opinions and ideas.It is said by some persons that they should share their thoughts through social networking
websites
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, while others believe that these
websites
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 are not the right way to express their opinions and ideas.In my perspective, both ways of sharing
thoghts
the content of cognition; the main thing you are thinking about
thoughts
 have their own features and demerits and my viewpoints on
this
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 issue will be elaborated in the aforementioned paragraphs.
on
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On
 the on hand, on social networking
websites
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 people can convey their messages freely without showing their identification to others and some persons make fake email accounts and indicate their views
.
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.
Another con of exchanging thoughts on these
websites
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 is that people who are less confident and
fearfullof
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 public speaking can get a chance to reveal their ideas
to
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in
 public and on these
websites
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 people can show their message by using
internet
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the internet
 and there is no need to go anywhere.
On the other hand
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, some of the people have contradictory viewpoints. They believe that these social networking
websites
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 are not the correct way of conveying their ideas because some people hide their identity and express
misleading idea
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a misleading idea
the misleading idea
on
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of
 these
websites
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 which can become the cause of any kind of dispute. For instance,
last
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 year famous celebrity had posted an inappropriate comment on
sikh
an adherent of Sikhism
Sikh
 religion and which has
hurted
be the source of pain
hurt
hated
 the feeling of
sikh community
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the Sikh community
Sikh community
 and created the situation of conflict.
so
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So
, when people speak publicly they are aware and neglect the situation to create ay kind of quarrel. To recapitulate, I would like to write that both ways are right to express
ideas but
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ideas, but
 individuals should speak carefully before presenting any idea publicly.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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