Some people believe that time spent on television, video and computer game can be beneficial to children. Others believe this has negative effects on a child. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your opinion.

Watching
tv
and playing
computer
games are two of the most important children’s leisure activities.
However
, whether they bring more harm than good has caused heated debate. My view is that too much
time
spent on these surely has negative impacts on kids and parents have to sort out the appropriate programs for children and curb these activities. Since the television viewing and video games
requires
Suggestion
require
minimum effort to turn on and off, it can be conducive to laziness. While other outdoor activities could improve both mental and physical strength by burning calories and building muscle, watching
tv
has nothing to so with these benefits.
For example
, for those spending watching
tv
Suggestion
TV
for too long may bear a high risk of obesity and become less muscular fit.
That is
not to mention that children spend less
time
interacting with their friends, which may inhibit their social skills
such
as conversation and interpersonal skill.
Moreover
, questionable contents on
tv
or
computer
games will result in unexpected implications on impressionable people.
For example
, many boys like playing
computer
shooting games including one of the most famous one called CS (counter-strike). While we are calling for world peace, our kids are learning how to use dangerous weapons through
this
game and get used to pulling the trigger without hesitation, it has been reported that one killer of
school shooting
Suggestion
a school shooting
school shootings
in the us used to play
computer
shooting games in his child- hood. In sum, spending too much
time
on watching the telly and playing
computer
games is definitely harmful to children. And parents should take
time
, regardless of how busy their schedule is, to guide and supervise these
activies
any specific behavior
activities
.
Submitted by Andy on

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