Some people believe that all wild animals should be protected. Others say that few wild animals should be protected instead. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Animal annihilation is an alarming issue the world over.

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some support the idea that all the

animals

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in the wild have the right to live, others believe that species close to extinction are the ones who need protection. In

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essay, I will discuss both

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views,

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strongly supporting the view that entire wildlife needs preservation.

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, over centuries human activity like industrialisation and deforestation has accelerated

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populace to decrease.

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earlier, there was no awareness which caused various living beasts to disappear from the planet, now governments have been alarmed and allocated funds for animal conservation.

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animals

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that are close to

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are carefully nurtured in

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zoos and big budgets are spent on their upkeep and breeding. A good example of

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is how China made efforts to conserve the giant panda populace and got them off the extinction list.

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, we cannot let the other

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die just because it's impossible to keep each one of them under watch.

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, since each and every

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is equally important to maintain the balance of the ecosystem they need protection.

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can be achieved

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care of their natural habitat. Governments around the world need to make strict laws against deforestation, which in turn protect all the wild creatures without much effort.

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, in India,

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Conservation Act was the biggest movement which saved the tigers in the wild and took them off the extinction list. To summarise, I would like to reiterate that

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something that protecting just a certain number of

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is enough I do not agree with the statement.

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, I would like to add that rather equal effort

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to be put

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saving the entire animal kingdom.

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task response

The essay addresses both views and provides some relevant examples. However, the introduction could be more engaging. The conclusion does not effectively summarize the main points and could be improved.

coherence and cohesion

The logical structure of the essay is generally good, but there are areas where the ideas could be more logically connected. Some sentences and paragraphs lack coherence and cohesion, which affects the overall clarity and organization of the essay.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

292 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

biodiversity
ecosystem
conservation status
ecological significance
holistic approach
endangered species
natural heritage
unforeseen negative impacts
economically non-viable
prioritization
ecosystem balance
conservation efforts

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