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Many people find it hard to balance their work with other parts of their lives. What are the reasons for this? How can this problem be overcome?

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With excessive workload in the 21st century, it is clear that many people now struggle to achieve a successful work-
life
 balance.
This
 essay will explore two reasons which cause
this
 phenomenon and propose measures that might address them. One concern with regards to our workplace is a stable job is not guaranteed.
This
 is because employers have the option of replacing poorly
performed employees
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performed, employees
, which means that any existing workers can be replaced by qualified fresh and post graduates.
Consequently
, employees force themselves to allocate more
time
 at the workplace and less
time
 for their personal
life
.
However
, in many cases, many people would have inefficient
time
 usage in the workplace to surf social media and play online games. In order to tackle
this
 issue, one should be able to focus on their tasks for a fixed amount of
time
, and they should not take additional responsibility when their work
time
 is out. Another reason why people are working more is that they want to satisfy material values.
This
 is because stressful city
life
 leads to people finding happiness, and that would mean
profit
Suggestion
a profit
 to advertisers: appealing advertisements encourage people to buy products for convenient use, because they can bring short-term happiness to their users. The result is detrimental: many workers are out of monthly money at the end, and
this
 reminds them to be a moneymaker at work.
Nevertheless
, people can avoid these purchases by focusing on inexpensive hobbies,
such
 as reading books and collecting stamps. These hobbies not only cost less money than buying products that
brings
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bring
 people
satisfaction but
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satisfaction, but
also
 increase the attention for their individual
life
. In conclusion, I believe that job stability and materialism are the two major reasons why keeping a balance between work and
life
 has become difficult, but
this
 can be solved in order by relocating one’s attention and focus on enjoyable hobbies.
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