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You have had a class discussion on space exploration. Now your teacher has asked you to write a composition answering the following question: Should governments spend so much money on space exploration when there are problems on Earth that need to be solved?

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Human has touched almost all entities of the world, including
space
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, earth, mountains and rivers etc. Nowadays, some countries are giving preference to the
space
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exploration
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.
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, some people think the
government
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 should not spend too much money in
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,
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 money should be used to resolve general life issues.
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 essay will delve into
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 point and,
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subsequently will
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subsequently, will
 explore my own perspective in turns. There are many reasons for the
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 to invest in
space
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exploration
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.
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,
investment
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 in
research
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 projects always gives monetary benefits. To explain in detail,
space
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exploration
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 is a trending
field
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,
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, most big organizations provide funds to support
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. If the
government
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 will not spend money to build institutes or
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 centres for
space
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exploration
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, surely the
government
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 will
lack
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 the
investment
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 from the big organizations.
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, employment opportunities will
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 decrease.
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, for a
country
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 to grow it is required to show his presence in all aspects of life. If the authority will
lack
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 an
investment
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 in any
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, he will not be able to compete with other countries.
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,
lack
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 of
research
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 will restrict them to manufacture products locally, and they will be forced to import product from other countries at higher rates. Another contributing factor is brain drain. Without enough expenditure of the
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, the
country
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 will
lack
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 the good institutes. As a consequence, a person with an interest in the same
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 will move out of the
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 for study or work, and the
country
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 can lose a person like Dr APJ Abdul Kalam, who did enormous growth in the
space
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research
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. In conclusion, for the growth of a
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, it is mandatory to do enough
investment
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 in all fields. From above it is clear that,
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 of support in any
field
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 can harm considerably.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • scientific advancements
  • technology development
  • resource scarcity
  • pressing issues
  • climate change
  • financial investment
  • balanced approach
  • international cooperation
  • innovations
  • practical applications
  • stimulate economic growth
  • foster
  • societal development
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