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You have had a class discussion on space exploration. Now your teacher has asked you to write a composition answering the following question: Should governments spend so much money on space exploration when there are problems on Earth that need to be solved?

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Human has touched almost all entities of the world, including
space
, earth, mountains and rivers etc. Nowadays, some countries are giving preference to the
space
exploration
.
However
, some people think the
government
 should not spend too much money in
this
,
instead
 money should be used to resolve general life issues.
This
 essay will delve into
this
 point and,
subsequently will
Accept comma addition
subsequently, will
 explore my own perspective in turns. There are many reasons for the
government
 to invest in
space
exploration
.
Firstly
,
investment
 in
research
 projects always gives monetary benefits. To explain in detail,
space
exploration
 is a trending
field
,
thus
, most big organizations provide funds to support
research
. If the
government
 will not spend money to build institutes or
research
 centres for
space
exploration
, surely the
government
 will
lack
 the
investment
 from the big organizations.
Moreover
, employment opportunities will
also
 decrease.
In addition
, for a
country
 to grow it is required to show his presence in all aspects of life. If the authority will
lack
 an
investment
 in any
field
, he will not be able to compete with other countries.
Also
,
lack
 of
research
 will restrict them to manufacture products locally, and they will be forced to import product from other countries at higher rates. Another contributing factor is brain drain. Without enough expenditure of the
government
, the
country
 will
lack
 the good institutes. As a consequence, a person with an interest in the same
field
 will move out of the
country
 for study or work, and the
country
 can lose a person like Dr APJ Abdul Kalam, who did enormous growth in the
space
research
. In conclusion, for the growth of a
country
, it is mandatory to do enough
investment
 in all fields. From above it is clear that,
lack
 of support in any
field
 can harm considerably.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • scientific advancements
  • technology development
  • resource scarcity
  • pressing issues
  • climate change
  • financial investment
  • balanced approach
  • international cooperation
  • innovations
  • practical applications
  • stimulate economic growth
  • foster
  • societal development
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