It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university what are advantages and disadvantages?

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Nowadays it

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seems

that students are taking a

year

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break after the schooling before going to to higher education. There are several merits and drawbacks for

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on the one side

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can empower the

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youth, however

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it can bring some academic issue.

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with, the positive

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a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon

effect

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is it would empower the teenagers through the real life experience. When they

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are taking

take

are taken

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they would prefer to go for

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a trip

or job through

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they get numerous real life experience like when

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(Black English) a member of a youth gang

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tour they engaged with different types of people, culture, language, food etc.

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would provide more knowledge rather than a

class room

a room in a school where lessons take place

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the person who travels around the world can use

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the English language

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highly qualified people

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particular country

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a particular country

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would teach the youngsters to manage their

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finances

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age they

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age, they

are financially protected by their parents.

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, when they take

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breaks

after schooling they need to find their own expenditure

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they become capable in their financial consumption.

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research conducted in India reveals that are 75 percentage of college students are doing a job along with their students or take

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breaks

for making money after schooling before going to territorial. In fact that, the

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that after the schooling impart various benefits to encourage them to become

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mature

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, the relax

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taken by the adults would

loose

fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense

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a valuable academic

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of them through

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they would need to replace

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additional

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for

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takes long

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to achieve their career.

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they start their territory education, they would face a bad impact

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with

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decision because they would lose a touch with their academic ability. It is difficult to catch back it would be reflected in their academic results so that

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impact from

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the

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of or associated with or requiring the use of the mind

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intellectuals

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would always provide a better experience

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for

them. Conclusively, the

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gap after schools make the individual more

powerful even

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powerful, even

if lack of

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of or associated with or requiring the use of the mind

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loss would

worsely

in a wise manner

wisely

affect the

teenagers

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teenager's

career.

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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university what are advantages and disadvantages?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Nowadays, more tasks at home and or are being performed by robots. Is this a negative or positive development?

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Many feel that happiness is mainly an individual responsibility while others feel that there are important external factors. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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