It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university what are advantages and disadvantages?

Nowadays it
is seems
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seems
that students are taking a
year
break after the schooling before going to to higher education. There are several merits and drawbacks for
this
on the one side
this
can empower the
youth
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youth, however
however
it can bring some academic issue.
To begin
with, the positive
affect
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
of
this
is it would empower the teenagers through the real life experience. When they
taking
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are taking
take
are taken
this
they would prefer to go for
trip
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a trip
or job through
this
they get numerous real life experience like when
goingTo
(Black English) a member of a youth gang
gangsta
tour they engaged with different types of people, culture, language, food etc.
This
would provide more knowledge rather than a
class room
a room in a school where lessons take place
classroom
.
For instance
the person who travels around the world can use
English language
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the English language
very
effiently
with efficiency; in an efficient manner
efficiently
rather than
high qualified person
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highly qualified people
highly qualified person
a highly qualified person
highest qualified person
in
particular country
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a particular country
particular countries
the particular country
.
Secondly it
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Secondly, it
would teach the youngsters to manage their
finance
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finances
likewise
at
this
age they
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age, they
are financially protected by their parents.
Although
, when they take
break
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breaks
after schooling they need to find their own expenditure
consequently
they become capable in their financial consumption.
For
example a
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example, a
research conducted in India reveals that are 75 percentage of college students are doing a job along with their students or take
break
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breaks
for making money after schooling before going to territorial. In fact that, the
time
that after the schooling impart various benefits to encourage them to become
matured
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mature
.
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.
On the other hand
, the relax
time
taken by the adults would
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
a valuable academic
year
of them through
this
they would need to replace
a
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an
additional
year
for
this
.
Consequently it
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Consequently, it
takes long
time
to achieve their career.
Additionaly when
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Additionally, when
Additionally when
they start their territory education, they would face a bad impact
by
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with
this
decision because they would lose a touch with their academic ability. It is difficult to catch back it would be reflected in their academic results so that
there
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they're
also
a
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an
impact from
this
.
Although
the
inteluctual
of or associated with or requiring the use of the mind
intellectual
intellectuals
time
would always provide a better experience
to
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for
them. Conclusively, the
year
gap after schools make the individual more
powerful even
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powerful, even
if lack of
inteluctual
of or associated with or requiring the use of the mind
intellectual
intellectuals
time
loss would
worsely
in a wise manner
wisely
affect the
teenagers
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teenager's
career.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • work experience
  • internships
  • traveling
  • life experiences
  • personal development
  • independent
  • self-reliant
  • educational progress
  • graduation timeline
  • financial burden
  • academic momentum
  • structured academic environment
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