Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?

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It is commonly believed that actors, music composers, and certain players are overpaid for the

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they do. Low-paid is defiantly an issue, which certain employment sectors have been facing,

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have been multiple reasons, which I will present in that essay, to support that above public figures only get paid what they deserve for their hard

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. Mostly, people make lots of sacrifices to earn the reputation and skill set in their specific areas. These sacrifices include, being away from their loved ones, seeing lots of failures before becoming famous, working extra hard to make themselves better, and not able to eat what they want, to maintain good physical or mental health. All these efforts and compromises come together as a success or prize at the end, when some people start believing that these hard working people are getting so much money. Rather than judging the book by its

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page, the efforts of these individuals must be considered, which they did, to get in a position where they are today.

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, Virat Kohali, captain of Indian cricket team and one of the most paid player in the history, acknowledged in a recent interview that he has not eaten his favourite food for years, because it is high in fat and he need to be fit and healthy on the ground to lead his side.

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, pay is being determined by the skill set of individuals, industry and the degree of influence people make on others. Film, music and sports are three big and competitive sectors which are followed by lots of others. Being that, people who

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in these industries are a role model for others in society.

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comes with extra monetary allowances which they deserve for their

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. Overall, I totally stand disagree with the given statement, and believe people get paid as according to their skills and hard

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they have done to acquire these skills.

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, types of industries and power of impacting others can

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be considered as contributing factors to determine the pay scale.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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Relevant & specific examples

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348 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Revenue generation
Supply and demand
Influence on culture
Trendsetters
Income disparity
Essential workers
Critical role
Public health
Endorsements
Economies
Compensation
Significant contribution
Technological advancements
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Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries it is illegal to reject candidates for a job based on their ages. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion.

Children should be allowed to make decision on their own. Discuss bothe the views and give opinion.

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Governments should make people responsible for looking after their own local environment. Do ou agree or disagree?

Stress is now a major problem in many countries around the world. What are some of the reasons that cause stress, and effects #stress #countries #world #effects