Many scientists believe that now we can study the behavior of a three-years-old child to see whether they will grow up to be criminals.To what extend do you think crime is determined by human nature?Is it possible to stop children from going up to be criminals?

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Some researchers are of the opinion that
heredictary
occurring among members of a family usually by heredity
hereditary
characteristics are the main factors resulting in crime commitment of children.From my point of view
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inherent
nature
has some impacts but it is nurture that plays a pivotal role in children’s development. On the one hand
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I agree
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innate characteristics have several influences on the process of moulding a
child
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everyone inherits some certain characteristics from parents.Some children are born to be quiet
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while some others are more active.If children
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like
engaging in violent games
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or has bad habits
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the youngest
age
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it means that they have
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an attitude of mind especially one that favors one alternative over others
tendency
of violence which is the motive for them to commit crime when growing up.
On the other hand
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I believe external factors related to upbringing and education are far more significant.A
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person’s
personality and behaviour are the result of the interaction between
nature
and nurture
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so it is
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defined
to mould a
child
into any direction by proper bringing-up.
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a
child
can receive proper training
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particularly learning to distinguish right from wrong
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they are less likely to go astray in their adolescence and adulthood.Even if a
child
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parents, but
brought away from that environment and provided quality education
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he will not be a criminal.
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the interplay
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heredity
hereditary
and environmental factors must be there. In conclusion
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my view is that both
nature
and nurture play a part in determining the character of a person and both are inextricably linked with each other.But nurture outweighs
nature
and it is
definetely
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
possible to prevent children from becoming criminals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crime
  • criminal behavior
  • human nature
  • environmental factors
  • interventions
  • prevent
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