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Many people believe that having a fixed punishment for all crimes is more efficient. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a fixed punishment.

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Punishing people who commit
crime
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 is important to maintain law and order in society. Some people believe that there should be a fixed
punishment
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 for all crimes.Others disagree.In their opinion motive behind the
crime
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 is
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 considered. I will discuss the benefits and drawbacks in the following paragraphs. To embark with, If there is same
punishment
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 for each
crime
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 all people who commit
murder
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 and rape will punish in the same way.
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 will definitely increase the judgement efficiency.Since the
punishment
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 is already given in the law books it will take less time for judges to pronounce the verdict.
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, when punishments are consistent there will be less law conflicts. On the other side, the above argument in the favour of single
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 at all, is not as logical as it sounds. To illustrate, human behaviour is always influenced by circumstances.
Crime
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 is no different. So, it is possible that two people who commit
murder
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 can have two entirely different motives.
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, one has perhaps committed the act because his/her intention was to kill while others have tried to save himself from the attacker who committed the
murder
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 accidentally.If there is a fixed
punishment
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 for
murder
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, they both will get the same
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 which is unfair.
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, it is
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 unfair to give juvenile the same
punishment
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 as adults. To sum up, While awarding the
punishment
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 judges should consider not only the
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crime but
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crime, but
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 the circumstances in which they have committed it.
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,
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 is not at all fair to treat all crimes same and give them the same
punishment
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.
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