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Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industries to move to regional areas outside large urban centers. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
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 industrialized world large sectors and organizations are growing at a very fast pace. Some people alleged that large scale production companies should prefer relocate in the remote
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 at the outskirt of cities. According to my perception, migration of these sectors is lucrative for both rural as well as for metropolitan citizens. In
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 essay, I will discuss my view point before giving a concrete conclusion. Commencing with the most significant reason supporting my viewpoint is decrease level of pollution in downtown. To be more specific, when large industries tend to move on remote
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, it would eventually decrease the traffic level in the city. Because when
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 companies are in the middle of cities, the traffic at the working hours will be more. As greater the traffic level more will be the utilization of public or private transportation which naturally consume fossil fuels.
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,
burning
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the burning
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release, as from one's grip
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 many hazardous gases are
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 the atmosphere which not only pollute the environment but
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 give birth to many diseases. It is generally seen that the central cities where corporate sectors are in the city centre the congestion, respiratory diseases are at maximum extent. Moving
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 in the same direction, location of the above mentioned companies is beneficial not only for city citizen, but
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also bring
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also brings
 fruitful results to the people residing in rural areas. As it not only boost up the employment opportunities for the local people, but
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 for the entrepreneurs as they can hire the workers at low wages as compare to urban areas. Beside
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, it
help
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helps
 to increase the economy of that particular
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.
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, when any industry opens in any remote
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, at least one member from each home get the chance to earn, which eventually improve their living conditions for the whole family. In Conclusion, shifting of big corporation sectors from metropolitan into countryside areas brings numerous lucrative outcomes, both for urban people as well as for village residents in term of health and economy respectively.
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