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Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#life #technology
It is a universal truth that
technology
 exerts a strong influence on mankind in
this
 day and age.
However it
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However, it
 is a polarizing topic that whether or not
technology
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the technology
 makes people’s lives easier. On the one hand, it is understandable why some advocate for a society without modern
technology
. They believe that some clear drawbacks are associated with technological advances. The dependence on automatic amenities has become more ubiquitous in many people. It is a truth that ones are lazier in their work compared to themselves in the past. My brother perfectly exemplifies in
this
 situation when he always uses the motorbike in lieu of walking despite a very short distance.
In addition
, Internet addiction is not a strange issue while smartphones nowadays have an inextricable relationship with humans.
Moreover
, in some areas, machines are replacing humans in doing work that leads to the increase in the unemployment rate.
On the other hand
, the advent of
technology
 offers people numerous benefits that make our lives easier.
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 and Automation plays a pivotal role in the development of the industry and agriculture. A host of expenses
such
 as manpowers, resources and time has dwindled thanks to the convenience of
technology
.
Additionally
, the information transmission method nowadays is almost done via online platforms
such
 as emails,
messages
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messages, instead
instead
 of the letter as in the past. These are the evidence that technological advance has helped people to handle work more easily. In conclusion, some may reckon that
technology
 may cause challenges to our
lives but
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lives, but
 it is undeniable that
technology
 has far-reaching effects on people in a positive way.
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