IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6

Some people believe that it is better to live and work in vertical cities. Others, however, think that horizontal cities are better for living and working. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #work #cities
Vertical cities are the cities which small space is used in many facilities so there are many high buildings. Horizontal cities are the cities that use large area to build city facilities. In horizontal cities, there are some high building. There are two opinions about life and do the
job
 on different type of cities. These different opinions usually happen to people who had a different type of
job
. The example, officers usually like to live in vertical cities.
This
 could happen because on vertical cities, there are apartment and office in one area so they can save the time to move. Another opinion come from people, which has profession as a farmer. The farmer doesn't like to live in vertical cities. They will spend their time on horizontal cities because in horizontal cities, there are many fields which can be used for product many kinds of vegetables, fruits, and rice. If farmer lives in vertical cities, they will get problems about the area that may be used in production. The conclusion about better live in vertical or horizontal cities will not be met if there are people who has a different type of
job
 give opinions. Cities which have been supporting facilities of our
job
 is the best choice. Different
job
 has different supporting facilities, so we should decide to live in horizontal or vertical cities based on our
job
. We should think about the cities which will be lived. If we take wrong choice we will spend much money to move to other cities.
Submitted by kriiiiiiss on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: