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Many people believe that having a fixed punishment for all crimes is more efficient. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a fixed punishment.

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It is often believed that retribution for any offence must be fixed and could not be changed on any basis. There may be a few pros and cons of
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 statement, because sometimes the situation and people can be changed with the time. So based on that we will discuss both consequences in the below paragraphs.
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 with, For some crimes fixed
punishment
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 can have an advantage for law. There are scenarios in which retribution criteria change while reaching the conclusion of the case.
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, as there is a death sentence for the rape case in most of the countries. But after the number of hearings and plea the it took
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a number
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 at the end of the hearing few people get the same
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 and other get the life sentence. So by
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 few criminals may escape from
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 Sometimes few gets bail after a few years. With
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 criminals supposed to execute more crimes in the future. In
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, the fixed
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 is an advantage and can decrease the offence in the country. On the other side, there are few criteria in which rigid
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 can be a disadvantage for a few people. Because there are many, who unintentionally get trapped in the offence.
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, in someone murder, there can be a number of executives, but in the initial stage one cannot get an idea of exact criminal. So with the fixed retribution, the life of person family can ruin. So it may have a disadvantage at that time. To conclude, every side has both consequences, so one should take a decision after seeing each and every aspect of
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the case
a case
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 can be risky for the law of the country.
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