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As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. Do you agree or disagree?

#money #businesses #responsibilities
It is argued that
besides
 generating profit, enterprises should
also
 conduct their business in a socially responsible manner. Personally, I agree with
this
 view. On the one hand, that companies must make money in order to survive in a highly competitive market. If a company is in good financial health, it will make a positive contribution to society.
Firstly
, the higher the earnings earned by businesses, the more taxes they pay to the government.
Therefore
, they have more money for public spending
such
 as investment in schools, hospitals, traffic infrastructure, which leads to an increase in the living standard of the whole community.
Secondly
, if the companies raise substantial revenues, they can reinvest, expand their production, and create more job opportunities within the community.
On the other hand
, businesses should do more for society
instead
 of the sole aim of maximizing revenue. One reason is that if the production processes
from
Suggestion
of
 the enterprises are out of control, they may have negative impacts on the environment
such
 as air pollution due to factory emissions or water pollution
as a result
 of the irresponsible disposal of industrial waste. Another reason is that companies should use a percentage of their income to support those who are unfortunate in society by awarding scholarships, donating money to local charities, and environmental programs. In conclusion, it is my firm belief that all businesses should profoundly reflect upon their social obligations rather than simply making a profit.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social responsibilities
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Ethical behavior
  • Societal impact
  • Stakeholders
  • Profit-driven
  • Public perception
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Community development
  • Human rights
  • Workplace safety
  • Altruism
  • Balanced approach
  • Accountability
  • Consumer loyalty
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