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Some people think that it is best to encourage children to leave their family home as soon as possible. Others believe children should stay at the family home for as long as they like. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Family plays
cruical role
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a crucial role
crucial role
critical role
 in the upbringing of a child. It is said by some individuals that children should be motivated to go away from their home as soon as possible
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while others believe that they should stick to their family. In my perspective
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 it should be the personal decision of the
children whether
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children, whether
 to stay or leave his / her family
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 but my viewpoints will be elaborated on both issues in the aforementioned paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, in
this
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 urbanized and globalized world people's way of thinking has been changed and it has seen in many developed and developing nations that there is difference between the thoughts of old and young generation which has created the situation of conflict among two generations which is the main stimulus for children's separation from their parents.
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, a survey was conducted in the year of 2017 in some of the developed countries of the world and its result was that parents ask their children to pay their
college's
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college
tution
a fee paid for instruction (especially for higher education)
tuition
 fees which really encourages them to leave their home.
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, children should live with their family because they learn some of the traditions, norms and rituals
from
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of
 their ancestors which are really essential for the
perservation
the activity of protecting something from loss or danger
preservation
 of a family. Another reason is that when children live with their parents
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then
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 they feel more secure and safe because they are taken care by their family members during tough time. To recapitulate,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would like to write that family is really important for a child because parents
makes
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make
 a child civilized
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 cultured and polished
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but they should not be pressurized to leave their family or they should live
separetly
apart from others
separately
 from their family, but they should live nearby to their parents.

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